Great guitar work. I wanted to put this one to the side and come back to it after a couple of days. At first I thought that the vocals needed work, and I still do, but in fairness, I feel like you should commit to a lower register, rather than just write back that 'they need work', because I think that aside from being too vague, it's something more precise -- lower register and more artculation on the individual syllables that you are singing. It's a good set of lyrics, but I'm missing them and the melody because it's a little rushed. Cool start!