I think it's a good start. You wrote that the track was 'unloveable' -- but it sounds good. First of all, and I mean this 100% seriously, the length is perfect -- 2:42, that's been the magic number for over 100 years, probably a lot longer -- probably has something to do with how much a brain can process -- even classical pieces that are long only stick with one theme for a few minutes at the most.
The productions is well put together and your vocals are nice -- very relaxed.
What are the lyrics?
Thanks,
-Shoham
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but I want this to work
And I talk too fast
that I'm a little brash
oh, and could I be quiet?
and that I make you tired
You start complaining about me
What do you want me to change?
but you're not worth it
If I make you embarassed
it's time to make this over
who said I wanna be?
your love is overrated
man, you're under three
You always find something to tease me over it
I know I said I'm in
but tell me again what its
Oh I'm quitting this
Oh I thought I was strong but oh
I'm weakening
though you are a jerk and a loser
Don't know why I put up with you over the years
You dont deserve me
You dont own me
Oh I'm quitting this
Oh I thought I was strong but oh
I'm weakening
though you are a jerk and a loser
don't know why I put up with you over the years
You dont deserve me
You dont own me
You don't own me
own me