I think it's a good start. You wrote that the track was 'unloveable' -- but it sounds good. First of all, and I mean this 100% seriously, the length is perfect -- 2:42, that's been the magic number for over 100 years, probably a lot longer -- probably has something to do with how much a brain can process -- even classical pieces that are long only stick with one theme for a few minutes at the most.
The productions is well put together and your vocals are nice -- very relaxed.
What are the lyrics?