Hidden aways next to the large city of Barbina, the village Bucatini is littered with houses with heaps-upon-heaps of glistening powder piled on top. Piraticus has blessed this town with many blessings, including the town favourite, “Holiday.” During Holiday, the town boils with excitement. A sneaky Santa couldn’t walk a block without being snowballed to insanity by the many “Season’s Greetings.” In an annual supernatural phenomena, a random group of seven houses divinely burn to the ground. The inhabitants feel blessed and touched, as the community gladly rebuilds the houses bigger and better in preparation for the new year. After all, the townsfolk need their pocket change for celebrating Holiday, and couldn’t possibly afford to rebuild seven houses each year if it weren’t completely necessary. And so they are grateful. The whole town of Bucatini gathers around the town square, in admiration of the large and elegant Festivus pole which reigns over the entire village. On the twenty-seventh of December the great gift-giving begins in this very spot. Again the townspeople feel blessed, for their annual tradition falls just after the great sale of Boxer’s day. Then tragedy struck. On the twenty-sixth morning of their seventeenth Holiday in Bucatini, a sharp silence pierced the walls of the house Mandonguilla. It’s a well-known tradition amongst the villagers to set their alarms early on Boxer’s-day-eve, so they can rise before the snow begins to melt Click to see full text
Genres: Fiction, Short Story, Other Writing

© 2012.
A Christmas-Season themed short story.
Date uploaded: Dec 20, 2012, 00:27 EST Show more info
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Rex Yehudi (shoham) gave feedback to Ian MacPhail for “Holiday”:
Very clever story. Quirky characters as always... One thing I would suggest is that while I enjoyed your narrative voice, I feel as if you could give a lot more power to your characters if you would give them some more dialogue.

I feel like they are interesting creatures, from an interesting world and would like to hear their voices a little more clearly in these stories.

Thank you,
 Dec 20, 2012, 11:11 EST
Ian MacPhail 
It had to be under 500 words, I barely got away with this because if you count the hypenated words as 1 word, it's 546 which is 500 + ~10% for experimental error.
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Rex Yehudi (shoham) 
Highly scientific! Still, I liked where you were going, and still wouldn't mind learning more about these characters...
flag (Dec 20, 2012, 20:50 EST)