sexy, i really like the imagery, "big bird yellow" is great. also like the simile of thicker than a bag of funyon rings, kind of makes me feel satisfied but sick as well, what is this about?
Hey, man thanks for reading! This is a very personal work for me. Hard for ME to put my finger on just what it's about. I guess the best way for me to explain would be to ask if you've ever gone back to your elementary school, or seen your first crush ten years later and thought "Is this it? I thought it was bigger/she was prettier!!!" Like nostalgia gone wrong. TL;DR Thanks for reading!
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