It's a good start guys, but I think that the lyricism could have some more depth to it. I enjoyed the straight forward keyboard line, but again the lyrics seem a little too repetetive for me.
One concept is to have a verse and chorus which are more distinct from one another. I feel like this track is not finished yet, but about 1/2 way there.
Keep up the good work and push yourself for even more... -Sho