JZC gave feedback to Barbara for “LAUGH”:
couldn't agree more! I love when my 2 kids laugh I saw "laugh club" and we start laughing :)
 Jan 18, 2012, 11:11 EST
Barbara 
Great! I'm glad you liked it
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Rex Yehudi (shoham) gave feedback to Barbara for “LAUGH”:
I really like your poetry, Barbara! Thanks for sharing. It's interesting how you used spacing to make this not just a piece of writing, but also a kind of visual art :D

Keep 'em coming, I love this kind of writing!

☮♥♬
-Sho
 Jan 15, 2012, 10:28 EST
Barbara 
You are so sweet.....thank you
flag (Jan 15, 2012, 12:25 EST)
Rex Yehudi (shoham) 
ur welcome b! happy dmlkj day :D
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Bojko gave feedback to 0ctavio G0nzalez for “Ode on Influence”:
I like it very much... I want to call it Beautiful!!!! great poetry dude!
 Jan 09, 2012, 05:13 EST
0ctavio G0nzalez 
hahaha, thanks. You can keep a copy :D
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JZC gave feedback to Barbara for “Tomarrow”:
this is great!! what a great artist you are! a woman of many talents!
 Nov 29, 2011, 22:39 EST
Barbara 
Thank you JZC,that means alot coming from you
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0ctavio G0nzalez gave feedback to Barbara for “Tomarrow”:
Wow :] Reminds me of Shakespeare, especially from the witches in Macbeth, but your poem is much more positive than their ditties!
 Nov 23, 2011, 08:30 EST


Barbara gave feedback to 0ctavio G0nzalez for “stlv1.2”:
I have read this several times and each time has awoke a new view in my mind.....I enjoyed this...I look forward to reading more from you
Barb
 Nov 22, 2011, 18:21 EST
0ctavio G0nzalez 
Wow :] Thanks for letting me know that you are getting some value out of my writing, it's truly an inspiration to write more!

I like your paintings as well,
-0G
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Ted Kindig gave feedback to WalaWalaWala for “The apparatus had us.”:
I had an interesting time reading this, WalaWalaWala: at first glance I skimmed it over and figured I'd more or less taken it all in, but there is another dimension to it if you take the time to read every word in real time. The repetition makes the phonetics and by extension the semantics seem strange, and the way in which none of the paragraphs sync with our internal expectation for four bar rhythmic phrasing is very subtly offputting. Not sure how consciously you planned for the form to complement the words, but it's quite interesting.
 Nov 22, 2011, 16:11 EST
WalaWalaWala 
I think it must have been luck on my part, but it was originally just "The Apparatus Had Us" and then I copied and pasted it, because that didn't really look that good so I copied and pasted it like 100 times. Here's another where I just used the same technique since you had a good response: http://www.feed-forward.net/w.2913_The_Rise_of_Kolkata I don't think that it turned out as well ;p

-Shoham

PS: The Apparatus Had Us.
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Ted Kindig gave feedback to WalaWalaWala for “The apparatus had us.”:
I had an interesting time reading this, WalaWalaWala: at first glance I skimmed it over and figured I'd more or less taken it all in, but there is another dimension to it if you take the time to read every word in real time. The repetition makes the phonetics and by extension the semantics seem strange, and the way in which none of the paragraphs sync with our internal expectation for four bar rhythmic phrasing is very subtly offputting. Not sure how consciously you planned for the form to complement the words, but it's quite interesting.
 Nov 22, 2011, 16:09 EST


Ted Kindig gave feedback to 0ctavio G0nzalez for “Jerusalem”:
Great poem, Octavio. For me, the most powerful moment is the uncertainty of the ending--the reality of war seems almost impossible to rectify with ideals of promised paradise, and the last line does a great job of heightening that contrast. Keep it up!
 Nov 18, 2011, 17:48 EST
0ctavio G0nzalez 
Thank you Ted :] I'm glad you like the poem, I was actually in Jerusalem when I wrote it. It was inspired by 'events on the ground' and a girl I was trying to hook up with/impress who I met online :] I'm glad somebody liked it :] I will try to keep it up!!!
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WalaWalaWala gave feedback to WalaWalaWala for “The Rise of Kolkata”:
True story :D
 Oct 04, 2011, 10:56 EDT

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