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Very clever story. Quirky characters as always... One thing I would suggest is that while I enjoyed your narrative voice, I feel as if you could give a lot more power to your characters if you would give them some more dialogue.
I feel like they are interesting creatures, from an interesting world and would like to hear their voices a little more clearly in these stories.
It had to be under 500 words, I barely got away with this because if you count the hypenated words as 1 word, it's 546 which is 500 + ~10% for experimental error.