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“Pray Your Gods”

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by Brian Vaughn

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▼ Genres: Rock, Electronic

This weekend I was thinking about artists that I used to enjoy listening to in highschool. Toad the Wet Sprocket came to mind, and I thought it would be fun to cover one of their songs. I've always liked "Pray Your Gods" - even though the chorus is a bit too happy sounding for me - because of the haunting ending. (As an aside, I learned that the phrase being repeated, "dona nobis pacem", means "grant us peace".)

Anyway... my goal wasn't to reproduce the song, but to remake it into something darker and moodier. I'm really happy with what I've gotten so far but I still need to work on the ending. I'm looking for some kids to sing the latin bit, either along with (or instead of me). I'd also like to build up the strings a bit more than they currently do.

All that being said... I'd love some feedback. What would you change about the mix? What do you like about it?

Lyrics:
I will give the secrets you request,
And you will be the one to sacrifice.
So lay your olive arms across my breast,
And sing the poems, free the butterflies.

Pray your gods who ask you for your blood,
For they are strong and angry jealous ones,
Or lay upon my altar now your love.
I fear my time is short.
There are armies moving close.
Be quick, my love..

I feel my body weakened by the years,
As people turn to gods of cruel design.
Is it that they fear the pain of death?
Or could it be they fear the joy of life?

Pray your gods who rule you by your fear,
For they are quick and ruthless punishers.
Or lay upon my altar now your love.
I fear my time is short.
There are armies moving on.
Be quick, my love.

Dona nobis pacem. (Grant us peace.)

Stream: 128 kbps, 44 kHz (joint stereo)

Download: 160.0 kbps, 44 kHz (joint stereo), 4.92 MB

Playing time (m:ss): 4:18

Date uploaded: May 15, 2012, 23:52 EDT Show more info