“J-Town...”

by 0ctavio G0nzalez

"Place of Peace": It seems absurd To offer such a noble word "Jerusalem" when such a place Turns cousins' spites to wars of race We talk of promise, fight for land but only scraps thereof, De-sanctify her holiness, and kill when we should love. It seems we've broken what was vowed, but it is written there are two One on Earth, ever declining, one in Heaven, ever new. One below where I reside, one in heights as yet unknown. A promise not forgotten, but an oath only postponed... Beyond the clouds, and sun, and stars, the Nightingale and aether-- Further out, where though there be some souls, the souls there be are few "Oleh!", and now forewarned am I, the 'gale is underneath her "Oleh, she is eternal, but she may not wait for you". Click to see full text

▼ Genre: Poetry
Tags: Sonnet

License: FeedForward Collaboration License
"Oleh" means 'rise' in Hebrew.

Date uploaded: Sep 12, 2011, 05:58 PDT Show more info

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JZC gave feedback to 0ctavio G0nzalez for “J-Town”:

so true and so upsetting that a place that represents ultimate holiness has so much suffering

Comment ☆ Like Link Flag Dec 05, 2012, 16:56 PST

0ctavio G0nzalez Muchos gracias. No hablo, Englais... (Dec 06, 2012, 15:17 PST)

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Ruth Zober gave feedback to 0ctavio G0nzalez for “J-Town”:

sad to think

Comment ☆ Like Link Flag Mar 31, 2012, 04:27 PDT

0ctavio G0nzalez it really is... (Mar 31, 2012, 19:37 PDT)

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Ted Kindig gave feedback to 0ctavio G0nzalez for “J-Town”:

Great poem, Octavio. For me, the most powerful moment is the uncertainty of the ending--the reality of war seems almost impossible to rectify with ideals of promised paradise, and the last line does a great job of heightening that contrast. Keep it up!

Comment ☆ Like Link Flag Nov 18, 2011, 14:48 PST

0ctavio G0nzalez Thank you Ted :] I'm glad you like the poem, I was actually in Jerusalem when I wrote it. It was inspired by 'events on the ground' and a girl I was trying to hook up with/impress who I met online :] I'm glad somebody liked it :] I will try to keep it up!!! (Nov 19, 2011, 05:41 PST)

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